I have changed some layouts but I'm still working through how I think the pages should look compositionally with text etc. so this should serve as a page numbers and rough layout guide only.
One bigger change is including Charlotte in the description of the cell changes on page 2 of the books. What do you think?
More work still to do on colour palettes and composition but we're getting closer. Ideally I'd like to lock this down early next week so I have time to create a full rough mock-up of the book for our Rethink meeting.
Questions? Let me know!
Grrr - just lost my comments - apparently can't go back mid-comment. Here we go again:
ReplyDeleteI really like Charlotte appearing in the How To Use the Book section.
I also really like the idea of the operation photographs. Although I had originally dismissed the idea as too scary, I think that having a series of them in a kind of 'text bubble' isn't as overwhelming as a full page image of mom on the operating table. Great idea!
Page 13 - mom is usually out of bed at this point - when the nurse came I would either sit on the edge of my bed or we'd even just sit in the living room or dining room. It would be good to get mom out of bed whenever we can in this book. :)
Chemo
I like the image of the cells - good call. A gazillion times better than a text box for kids this age. It still might be hard to understand, but it's pretty abstract even for adults. All good.
One possible image for page 18 was getting blood taken. I can write it in to the text - you have to get your blood tested before every chemo to make sure your counts are up - I certainly had blood pressure, but that was more on the day of chemo. Getting your blood taken is SUCH a huge part of chemo - it would be good to include that on page 18.
Page 20 - exactly! Possibly a photo of the chair and the IV together??
Page 22 - I really love that idea of the book upside down. Perfect!
Page 26 - could photograph the backpacks?
Page 28 - if we go with the photograph idea (still working on this ending - sorry!), would it help balance the picture by having another one on the left (angry or surprised or scary or mad???)?? I bet Morgan would approve of this in terms of talking about feelings... Photograph of a camera?
Radiation
Page 2 - I'm not sure why, but I feel like I would lean towards just one breast MRI photo in this book... I don't know why. And then, not sure what we'd put in this image. Let me think on this one a bit. Maybe as I see the whole storyboard in one image on the screen & we don't have all of the images yet, maybe those two just jump out at me at the moment - maybe it would all flow nicely and not be jarring in the book format. Will think.
Hmmmm... I think I just figured out what was bothering me about this (I've just gone through my comments and came to this one) - I didn't - and many women don't - have a breast at this point. So having an MRI of a breast at radiation would not apply & might even be difficult for some women to see. Let's think about what else we could include here. We'll find it!
Radiation
Page 36 - I would suggest that the POV would stay the same in this image and just have the radiation machine rotate around (if they'll do this for us!)
Page 36/37 - in my experience (which might not be typical - who knows), I never saw my radiation oncologist anywhere near the radiation treatment rooms. Could we combine the images on 36/37 (see the machine rotating through the technician's window)...hmmm... now that I've said that it would probably be pretty busy. I could also change the text on 37 to include the fact technicians on the other side of it all... Or, we could just go with the image you suggested to include all of these ideas... Again, will think...
Finished
page 46 - for some reason I would like to take the calendar off of the fridge in this image. It feels reminiscent to radiation and in this story I like to feel like the family is kinda 'moving on' - ya know? What do you think? You saw my fridge - it's plastered! It could be a school picture of Charlotte or a few pics of Charlotte with friends/mommy - something - I think it would be nice to have something on the fridge...
Page 49 - do you want me to go back to saying they're doing a 'walk' in the text or keep it as 'raising money'. Either way works.
Thanks for all of this Jason - so exciting!
Karyn